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      I have died a thousand deaths since that first glimpse. A thousand times I have drowned in the want of you.
      To finally have you here with me…The air, thick with your scent; I think of high priestesses of old, bathed in rosemary, clove, green leaf; of consorts to kings. I wonder how many you have seduced. It doesn't matter. Just for a moment, this moment, you will be mine, as I have always been yours. For this moment, I would trade my soul. For this moment, I will give my life.
      "I cannot bear the thought of you in the arms of another," I say, brushing my hand soft against your cheek. "Be mine, just for tonight."
      Arms stretched out for me. Lips parting, I feel the hunger in you. Now that I have offered, can you resist? Your arms around my neck, pulling me closer. I had feared it would be cold, here in your embrace. But it is warm, so warm.
      "But, grá mo chroí, pulse of my heart, tomorrow is another night."
      These words whispered softly against my skin wind their way up to bite at my ear. I dismiss them. "Tomorrow may never be."
      You are light in my arms, like dried flowers, beauty forever remembered, life forever hinted at. Noise drifts in from the open window. The sound of the city. It seems so abstract now, far away. You are a goddess, my dark queen, everything forbidden and warned about.
      I feel your breath on my neck, your nails biting my back. It is bliss.
      As teeth penetrate skin I realize I am afraid; of losing myself, of losing you to this night. "Make it all better," I beg. "Lie to me."
      "I cannot," you say. "I love you too much."
      Thank you. That will do.
      Your teeth pierce my flesh. My heart, beating faster now, pumping vital fluids past your delicate lips. Your hunger, not sated but growing with each beat. I am filling you. Your eyes flutter, rolling back to show too much white.
      "Slow…please," I say, "…go slow."
      "Not to worry, mo chroí. I intend to have you all night."
      The lyrics of a dozen Irish dirges dance across my mind, a jumbled mix of sorrow and defeat, love and beauty, hope and loss. "Will you think of me after this night? Will you lie upon my grave and weep for me when I am gone?"
      Blood and spirit rush from me now, each drawn from familiar channels, eager to explore your every fiber.
      Your lips, so red against pale skin, withdraw from my neck to whisper, "you will always be a part of me."
      "Gazelle to your lioness?"
      "Feel," you say, taking my hand and pressing it to your chest. "Tá mo chroí istigh ionat. That is your heart beating."
      I am within you. My heart beats in you now, as I always knew it would.
      "But…can we not stop, right here? Upon this threshold?"
      "Pillow talk, my love. This is your desire. It is too late to turn back."
      I know this is true. And I will not willingly break our embrace. "Take it all then. All that I am, I give to you."
      I live a lifetime with you in my arms. In these stolen moments we walk in the sun, light illuminating your perfect skin until you shine like angels might. I imagine all those little things that will never be – waking next to you, walking with you on my arm, your belly ripening with child, growing old by your side. I have felt your touch a thousand times in a thousand dreams. I live each of these, hoping you will draw them from me along with the rest. Hours pass. I fade.
      You sway in my arms, my exertion your own now. I use my last strength and will to hold you tight. "Thank you," I whisper.
      "Sleep now," you say, "Sleep, mo chroí."
      I pull your face from where it rests against my chest to look in your eyes one last time. Your tears match the color of my offering, the color of regret upon your lips. My kisses clear each in turn.
      You always said death is a messy business. I know you prefer distance after you have fed, never to be there at the very end. But just this once, my love…stay with me
Just a bit of dark micro-fiction. 740 words.
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Mereneth Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I think the only thing I dislike about non chaptered micro fiction is the lack of more of the same story to read.
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mirovia Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha! I'm hoping to write more featuring this heroin.
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Mereneth Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
heroine. heroin is le drug..
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mirovia Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks. I'll blame that one on the iPhone :)
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grievuspwn4g3 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2012
dark, exquisite, and passionate. very impressive.
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mirovia Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks!
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grievuspwn4g3 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012
np
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winterkate Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2012  Student Writer
Wow. Nice vampire story, very unorthodox, very non-traditional, I love how it's done. Brilliant description.
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mirovia Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks! I really appreciate that :)
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winterkate Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome!
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Poison2007 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Nicely written. Keep it up!
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mirovia Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I will! Thank you for the encouragement :D
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EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012  Student Writer
Wow, this is very powerful and amazing, I love it!
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mirovia Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. Very much :D
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EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2012  Student Writer
you're welcome c:
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bdaycrazy Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012
WOOOOWWWW!!!!!!!!! It's so moving. It's a pretty interesting way to look at vampires.
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mirovia Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!
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bdaycrazy Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012
you're welcome!!! :)
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CreativityIsBliss Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Great. Lovely set up.
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mirovia Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks!
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ahley Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Wow such a great read!!
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mirovia Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for reading!
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Artisexpressive Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
wow great job very dark yet emotional
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mirovia Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!
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Artisexpressive Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
you welcome
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Winang Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2012  Student General Artist
WOW factor :o
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mirovia Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks!
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Winang Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Student General Artist
np! :)
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Dramira-Official Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful, dark, artistic. I absolutely loved reading this. The gothic romance genre has faded since Twilight gave vampires an overall bad name and turned them into a trend. This is the kind of thing I like to see. I'm a fan of vampires myself. Never read nor saw the movies of the trendy sings (their plots when told about them didn't interest me), and it won't sway me from enjoying the subject matter. Good on you for still writing this. I have a piece, and many more to come, and I was told I shouldn't "do" vampires. Screw that, that's the story, who the character became, it's integral, it matters, and I like it.
I only wish I had your talent with words.
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mirovia Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome. Thanks so much for the comment. I'm looking forward to reading your work.
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CJWilde Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2012  Student Writer
I am going to go ahead and embarrass myself now, because although the theme of vampires and blood-drinking has been so horribly overdone since the release of Twilight, and is a subject matter I feel now has a warning sign hung over the top saying 'writers: avoid at all costs'; as a flash fiction this piece was so carefully constructed and pumped with emotion, by the terribly dark and emotive ending - I imagine all those little things that will never be . . . Hours pass. I fade. - I honestly shed a tear. You have a powerful way with words and this wasn't just a 'vampire romance' to me. It was original, compelling, gripping in every way and took me on a journey through the last thoughts of somebody who was selfless enough to give themselves for the life of the person they loved. :worry:

What impressed me is how you appear to write intellectually. Your use of code switching in the dialogue of the female character was clever and interesting, and although I did not recognise nor understand the language she used, this lent an air of mystery and intrigue to her character. This itself was a beautiful contrast to the male lead, who was so open and frank with his emotions and his raw, needing love for her. It played out like the nerd who falls in love with the cheerleader in high school, but with so much body and emotion to it. It really did throw his desperation to be what she wanted him to be into light.

Your grammar was interesting and the short, fast-paced dialogue had me gripped throughout. My only critique here would be that I felt the final, cutting phrase - stay with me... - may have had more impact had it been on a separate line. Otherwise, I did leave the piece feeling wanting of more information about the characters. I would have liked to see a little more body to their situation; perhaps a flashback of their past together as he met death, or some sort of reference to how he had fallen in love with her in the beginning. I just think that it would have been nice. :)

This was a beautiful piece and I enjoyed reading it. Keep up the great work. :aww:
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mirovia Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for the read and for the beautiful comment. I've thought about making this a longer piece and have even outlined a bit of the backstory. So many things to write, so little time!

The language she speaks is Irish Gaelic and she generally echoes in English. So much more beautiful in Gaelic though:

grá mo chroí - pulse of my heart

tá mo chroí istigh ionat - my heart beats in you.

That language was made for expressing love and pain. Anyway, thanks again for reading.
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CJWilde Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Student Writer
I actually have an ex partner who spoke Irish Gaelic and it is one of the most beautiful languages I have ever heard, so I can relate perfectly. As for reading, it was my pleasure. :aww:
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roamingtigress Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2012
Very powerful piece. Well written, I love the whole flow and emotion here.
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mirovia Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks so much!
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roamingtigress Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012
You are very welcome!
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sly97 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2012  Student
Astounding. I can't even use words to describe how good that story was.
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mirovia Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks :)
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sly97 Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Student
You're welcome. :)
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Tianna-Reynolds-XoXo Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2012  Student Writer
ohhh....this was good....!!!
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mirovia Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for reading! :)
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blackartrevolution Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2012
brilliant...i read some stories too but not as good as this <3
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mirovia Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much.
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homestuckitis Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2012  Student Writer
Vampiiiires 8D

Screw the sprakly ones, I love you 8D
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mirovia Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha! Thanks. No sparkles here. I think we should let vampires be vampires in all their undead awesomeness :D
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PossumFan Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
My God... This is absolutely brilliant!!! I love this... So, so, so very much. You, sir, are brilliant!
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mirovia Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. I really appreciate that!
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PossumFan Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome.
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WordxWhammyxxi Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very creative and the romance in this can be felt by me so strongly...and I'm sure by many other readers! :) Wonderful piece of literature! :D
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mirovia Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! Really appreciate the read and the comment :D
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